Friday Fictioneers – Eye in the Sky

This week’s prompt for Friday Fictioneers could go anywhere. I don’t know where I was going, only that I didn’t get a restful sleep so I’m feeling a little goofy.

The picture:

They said it was the moon that shone down on us, so bright in the sky even with the clouds. I knew it was an eye. I saw shadows that would flit across it, blinking. Everyone said I was crazy. The kept me locked up. The straight jacket only came off a week after I stopped screaming about how it could see us. The world was ending and I stared into its every night, the milky pupil that gazed down on humanity and judged us wanting.

The window I had was exposed to the sky and I watched it every night, watching us and waiting for the gates to open so that it will take over.

116 words

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8 Responses to “Friday Fictioneers – Eye in the Sky”

  1. TheOthers1 Says:

    Something to think about. The word crazy is tossed out, but what if your mc ends up right? Nice take. 🙂

    My attempt:

  2. A good sense of foreboding in this piece. It’s always scary when you can’t make people believe you. Nice one.

  3. This had a nice tone to it. Distanced and detached, your MC’s voice makes me a believer in her vision. I kept waiting for the world to end or for the Eye to free her. Well done.



  4. What works so well is that, by the end, I’m wondering who’s really right? Who’s really crazy? Is it the moon or is it an eye?


  5. Nicely, eerie–I love a spooky story———as long as it’s not TOOOOO spooky. 🙂 Well done.


  6. Kind of leaves you wondering could she be right?
    Here’s mine:

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