First Campaign Challenge

There is the first campaign challenge over at Rach Writes

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)

For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!

The door swung open. Lori held her breath it swung, barely stopping in front of her face. She clutched at the knife in her hand. She didn’t have a gun and she didn’t know any self defense. So she was hiding behind the door and hoping that whoever broke in didn’t hear her thundering heart beat.

There was the whisper of fabric and she thought there was a shadow on the carpet. She bit hard into her lip so her teeth wouldn’t chatter.

There was a whisper of voices. Something about her not being there. Maybe? It was hard to eavesdrop when there was a door between them. She didn’t want to risk moving closer to where she could hear at the hinges.

“We’ll come back later.”

THAT she could hear. A man’s voice, accented. Maybe English? She watched a lot of BBC. She was a sucker for the accent but after this, not so much.

“Come on, mate. They might decide to show up as well. We need to keep an eye out.”

Her eyes widened at the words. There were going to be more of them showing up? Whoever they were.
She wanted to be back in bed.

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27 Responses to “First Campaign Challenge”

  1. This definitely feels like an excerpt from a larger work! Dramatic scene.

  2. lol about the BBC part; great characterization there! You should definitely expand on this so we can read more

  3. Good suspense! I enjoyed it! Thanks.

  4. Dramatic, very tense scene. But it needs more! Another 200 words, yeah?

  5. I think that would put me off the English accent for a while too…

    Very suspenseful.

  6. What a vivid bit of work you wrote here. Not only could I see the scene, but could relate to the character.

    Great job, Nellie! 🙂

  7. Love the last few lines. You could expand this into a longer piece.

  8. She’s in quite the pickle isn’t she? I want more details. good job. Mine is #72

  9. More ‘visitors’ will be arriving? Sounds like Lori’s in for a long night! Love how you edged the drama with humor!

  10. “A sucker for the language” … great 🙂

  11. eep- scary the thought they they are there for her and not the TV

  12. I so want to know what they want with her. Curious and curiouser! Nicely done, Nellie. =)

  13. Hey, hey! I’m one of the judges in the Campaign Challenge and I wanted to know that I picked your piece as one of my top favorites! Now it will move on to the next round of judging…congrats! 🙂

  14. Hi Nellie!

    Your Flash Fiction entry was selected by Rachel as one of the random winners!

    You’ve won a book(s) of your choice from The Book Depository (max value $15). Take a look on their site, pick out what you’d like, and let me know!

    If you wouldn’t mind sending me your full name, mailing address, and email – along with your selection – I’ll get that ordered for you asap!

    My email: elschneider@hotmail.com

    Congratulations!

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